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Post by Blaze on Oct 3, 2014 11:51:05 GMT -12
Ok, so anyone who reads "Blaze and Angela" I could use some feed back on what you think. If you like it or hate it, what you'd like to see about it, what you think about the character, and anything else u want to say! Thank u^.^
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TheMohawk
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Post by TheMohawk on Oct 11, 2014 18:05:50 GMT -12
I feel like it's a good series and going in the right direction, but you have the tendancy to leave out a lot of details that may or may not be important. I had a conversation tonight with one of my friends who happens to be a very experienced writer. I asked him to read your series and this is basically what he told me: In order to be a successful writer, you must include details of what things look like, whether it be through the use of figurative language such as a similie or just a plain description that highlights major aspects.
For example, if you had a man standing in front of you..
A: What does he look like?
B: What is he wearing?
C: Where do you think he's from?
D: Is he carrying anything?
E: His mannerism: how does this character act and behave?
If you had a room you were describing:
A: What color are the walls?
B: What are the walls/floor made out of?
C: What is in the room that really sticks out?
D: What are some other things in the room that may just be very plain?
E: What really makes that room that room?
I myself and my friend both hope you found this post helpful to your writing. It may come in handy someday.
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Post by Blaze on Oct 12, 2014 4:57:57 GMT -12
Thank u very much ^.^
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